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Old 04-16-2018, 12:41 AM   #1
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Default Sometimes I write poetry...

Found a little something something in a file cabinet.

When I was in the Professional Writing program at Univ. Houston-Downtown, I took a rhetoric/literature course. We read some anti-cop poem titled "Power" by Audrey Lourde http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/240144.

Our assignment was to write our reaction to it. I guess the professor was used to the youngsters in the class soaking up her liberal bias and regurgitating more liberal bull****. She wasn't expecting my reaction.

When I had to read it out loud to the class you could have heard a pin drop. No one said a word. She stopped me on the way out the door after class and said, "I'm sorry...I think I struck a nerve". I said, "Yes ma'am. But I'm used to it at this socialist college.".

I got an A in the class and she asked my permission to publish it in the "Bayou Review" (UH literary magazine). Just another chapter in the life of Bobby Minchew....redneck poet. =)

Here's what I wrote (it makes more sense if you read Lourde's poem first). Here's her poem:

Power

BY AUDRE LORDE


The difference between poetry and rhetoric

is being ready to kill

yourself

instead of your children.


I am trapped on a desert of raw gunshot wounds

and a dead child dragging his shattered black

face off the edge of my sleep

blood from his punctured cheeks and shoulders

is the only liquid for miles

and my stomach

churns at the imagined taste while

my mouth splits into dry lips

without loyalty or reason

thirsting for the wetness of his blood

as it sinks into the whiteness

of the desert where I am lost

without imagery or magic

trying to make power out of hatred and destruction

trying to heal my dying son with kisses

only the sun will bleach his bones quicker.


A policeman who shot down a ten year old in Queens

stood over the boy with his cop shoes in childish blood

and a voice said “Die you little mother****er” and

there are tapes to prove it. At his trial

this policeman said in his own defense

“I didn't notice the size nor nothing else

only the color”. And

there are tapes to prove that, too.


Today that 37 year old white man

with 13 years of police forcing

was set free

by eleven white men who said they were satisfied

justice had been done

and one Black Woman who said

“They convinced me” meaning

they had dragged her 4'10'' black Woman's frame

over the hot coals

of four centuries of white male approval

until she let go

the first real power she ever had

and lined her own womb with cement

to make a graveyard for our children.


I have not been able to touch the destruction

within me.

But unless I learn to use

the difference between poetry and rhetoric

my power too will run corrupt as poisonous mold

or lie limp and useless as an unconnected wire

and one day I will take my teenaged plug

and connect it to the nearest socket

raping an 85 year old white woman

who is somebody's mother

and as I beat her senseless and set a torch to her bed

a greek chorus will be singing in 3/4 time

“Poor thing. She never hurt a soul. What beasts they are.”



And my response:


Powerless: A Response To Audre Lourde’s “Power”


The difference between poetry and rhetoric
Is being ready to kill another
To save a third party’s life

I am trapped on a desert of uncivilized civilization
And a dead officer drags his pierced Kevlar vest
Off the edge of my sanity

Mucus appears rudely from his unwiped nose and the lack of blood
Is a bold-faced lie—there are miles of bullet trails from stomach to stern
And mine churns as a future phone call looms
To a wife and three daughters of a once breathing friend

Without thinking or reason I thirst for revenge…for the wetness of his poisoned blood
But like the others, he will sink into the sheltering contractions of a miscarriage of justice
Without a care for anything but his own stinking hide (people have skin)

I blink and swallow the power that I try to breathe into breathless lips but that power seeps out of new holes, evil holes
Holes that only a skilled mortician can camouflage

This cop had the power to stop one who had not grown into his power
He saw the flash of steel, heard the vulgar shouts and reacted a second too slow
Now his unfillable cop shoes are stained crimson and a polluted river of society
Flows onto the dirty street—a torrent let loose by a broken dam of parental ignorance and sloth

If a tape could have been recorded we could have heard
“Lord, please don’t let me die, make him drop the gun”
At the trial the cop said nothing—to the end of the time the cop says nothing
Who wants tapes of nothing?
At his trial the suspect says nothing. He doesn’t have to…constitution says so.
But what if all the witnesses are scared or dead? Hmmmph.

Now that 17-year old being with a 40-year old’s criminal history
Has been set free by a twisted system that does not allow criminal history into the courtroom
And lets a robber-killer smile while a widow weeps

The thin blue line that shields us from the animals has been snipped at both ends…again
The bagpipes play but his children don’t
A life sentence means 30 years…but a life taken means forever.

Another tape was found today.
Intermittent poetry and rhetoric.
Why did he give me a ticket? (YOU WERE SPEEDING)
He ought to be out catching robbers and rapists! (I TRIED, NOW I’VE DIED)
Don’t they have anything better to do? (YES, BUT THIS IS MY JOB)
What’s the big deal? They get paid for that. (I GET PAID TO SERVE AND PROTECT)

The cops can’t riot
The cops can’t quit
The cops can’t loot
The cops can’t beat society senseless and set a torch to it
Because a 12 man chorus will be singing “Guilty, Guilty, Guilty” in ¾ time

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Old 04-16-2018, 03:50 AM   #2
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Pure greatness. I salute you sir.
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Old 04-16-2018, 04:30 AM   #3
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Pure greatness. I salute you sir.


That’s powerful stuff.
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Old 04-16-2018, 05:01 AM   #4
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Sad that such a talented mind is poisoned. Sad that your poem is not fiction. God bless you Bobby and all those like you that draw the thin blue line.
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Old 04-16-2018, 05:50 AM   #5
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Wow brother!
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Old 04-16-2018, 05:52 AM   #6
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Wow! That is very well written! God stuff right there and so **** true! I wish I could have seen their faces when you read it


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Old 04-16-2018, 06:05 AM   #7
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Well done .
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Old 04-16-2018, 06:14 AM   #8
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Way to Shut her up!!! That is awesome.
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Old 04-16-2018, 06:24 AM   #9
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Amazing work.
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Old 04-16-2018, 06:33 AM   #10
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Well put together, Bobby.
Hate that you had to write it at all.
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Old 04-16-2018, 06:37 AM   #11
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Old 04-16-2018, 07:11 AM   #12
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Good job Chew.
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Old 04-16-2018, 07:25 AM   #13
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You have a gift with words.
Powerful poem.
Thanks for sharing.
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Old 04-16-2018, 07:32 AM   #14
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That is Great Bobby! Absolutely Great and spot on!
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Old 04-16-2018, 07:38 AM   #15
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As expected. Awesome!
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Old 04-16-2018, 07:41 AM   #16
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well played and well written Bobby.......
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Old 04-16-2018, 07:50 AM   #17
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Chew, your writings never let me down........ Great words transcribed sir.

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Great work. Well written and good response.
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Well done Bobby, and thank you for what you do.
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Old 04-16-2018, 08:20 AM   #20
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Well done, Bobby...
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Old 04-16-2018, 08:25 AM   #21
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Well written and unfortunately very true. Thank you for sharing.
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You have been fighting the good fight, Chew. On many levels.
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Awesome
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Old 04-16-2018, 11:16 AM   #24
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I love it!
Great job!!
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Good stuff!
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Old 04-16-2018, 11:28 AM   #26
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Thank you.
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Old 04-17-2018, 01:27 PM   #27
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Incredible job
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Greatness
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Old 04-17-2018, 01:52 PM   #29
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I liked yours a lot better.
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Bump for our Bobby on CHEWSday!! Well done sir!
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Old 04-17-2018, 02:31 PM   #31
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Oh wow. Dang drunk posts can be interesting!
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Thanks guys.
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Powerful, sad, true, but few will hear. Even fewer will be compelled to react in a way to help turn it around, only more violence, more loss, more bitterness... as in the time of Sodom and Gomorrah, so many have been lost to evil...

After reading both pieces, I am left with a bitterness in my mouth and a knot in my inner-most being knowing what you have written is sadly true...
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Old 04-17-2018, 05:47 PM   #34
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Powerful, sad, true, but few will hear. Even fewer will be compelled to react in a way to help turn it around, only more violence, more loss, more bitterness... as in the time of Sodom and Gomorrah, so many have been lost to evil...

After reading both pieces, I am left with a bitterness in my mouth and a knot in my inner-most being knowing what you have written is sadly true...
Yessir. The future is bleak if we keep going the same direction.
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Greatness. Thanks for sharing.
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"Now his unfillable cop shoes are stained crimson and a polluted river of society
Flows onto the dirty street—a torrent let loose by a broken dam of parental ignorance and sloth."
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Amazing, Bobby. Very impressive.
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Duuuude.......that's deep stuff. Greatness for sure Chew!

.......but aren't poems supposed to rhyme? <----that's a joke.
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Old 04-17-2018, 09:39 PM   #39
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Well said!
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Best poetry I ever done read Bobby! I would have loved to see their faces while you read it in class.


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Old 04-18-2018, 07:19 AM   #41
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Great job That poem needs to be read by everyone, espically to anti police people. I think it could do a lot of good. Thanks for sharing it I enjoyed the story with it also.
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Powerful, sad, true, but few will hear. Even fewer will be compelled to react in a way to help turn it around, only more violence, more loss, more bitterness... as in the time of Sodom and Gomorrah, so many have been lost to evil...

After reading both pieces, I am left with a bitterness in my mouth and a knot in my inner-most being knowing what you have written is sadly true...
Well said Charlie.


In better news. I got word on two injured brothers yesterday afternoon. Pct. 4 deputy Justin gay who was shot last year and sufferd broken femurs is walking on his own for a bit. Short spells but it's a start. His coworker deputy Gaines took a buck shot round to the groin this week and will be ok

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Mesmerizing stuff there
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Great response Bobby. I would have asked for a refund of my tuition if they had ask me to read the first poem.
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Bravo Sir.....Bravo!
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Of all places and times, at a job interview unrelated to LE, the subject of those who wear badges was discussed. Partly it came about because of certain people I happen to know personally. Was asked how I had made friends with these
individuals. During our discussion it was made clear what I thought of the media making certain folks look villainous in the news no matter what.
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You is a poet. Nice stuff. What year was it written?
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You is a poet. Nice stuff. What year was it written?
Somewhere around 2000 or 2001 I think
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Bobby, you never cease to amaze me.
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